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Fear is always lurking, some its on the mind more than others. For the fear of death has crossed everyone's mind at some point. However in the book, "White Noise" the fear of death is a constant fear in their minds, it is surrounding them. Each person is dealing with this fear differently; from being completely terrified by it and running from the fear to being amused by it and accepting death for what it is. In this novel it is taught to us that no matter how you deal with death, it will be there at the end waiting for you alone.
Hello there! I really enjoyed reading your thesis, it actually reminded me of my own! I picked fear of death as well! I like that your opening sentence seems to draw you in. Only think was, I was a bit confused as to what your thesis was? Was it the last sentence? Our teacher said our thesis needed to be something that someone could argue against....I don't know if this helps at all...I think your paper will be great though!
ReplyDeleteThis is an awesome thesis paragraph. I like that the opening sentence just grabs your attention and tells you what the essay will be about. The only thing that I can say is that your thesis itself is not clearly stated in a sentence, though you obviously deduce what it is when reading the paragraph. I think this will be a good essay. Good luck.
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Deanna,
ReplyDeleteI think fear of death was a great topic to choose for your thesis. However, I agree with Danielle. I am not sure of what your thesis was either. It does need to be something that is arguable throughout the essay. That is how you will create your paper by spawning from your thesis. The topic you chose though is great and I think you can take it very far! Good Luck!
Molly
I think we are all having a hard time with this novel and the writting of this essay. I think you have a great start, the beginning of your essay is defenatly an attention grabber. I would work on the ending. I think it needs to be a bit more argumentative. I am sure your essay will be great. Good Luck!
ReplyDeletei think you're topic choice is good. but as well as the others the thesis is a little off. i would suggest putting some points in it about how you're going to build your essay. GOOD LUCK!
ReplyDeleteI totally agree with you in that, this essay is killing me. I also chose the topic of death and I am struggling with actually grasping this topic. I know that the thesis statement was raw and uncut and soon I hope to see a more refined and accurate one as mine progresses too!
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